Lost Spiderman

Here is an example of my term two writing. It is a narrative thatg I enjoyed writing because I enjoy making up stories. Something I'd improve is my use of speech marks and capital letters. Thanks for reading my story, I'd like your feedback.

WALT: write about what happens before, during and after the event in the image.

• Write in the third person using language such as he she him her them their
• Use a hook at the beginning to engage the reader
• use interesting words
• Use detail

spew spew the web going fast to the night sky

Spiderman was tall and got blues and got short blonde hair samart, strong, silly and brave.

Spiderman was lost in the new york city at night sky he had no food and water he was trying to keep alive because he had no food and he was really starving for food and thirsty and he said to a man “ do you have any food on you place’’ than the man said “ sorry I don’t any food on me maybe you can come with me to my house so I can give you some food ‘’ replied the man than spider said “ no think you I’ll will go and ask some other people think you for offering but no’’ than spiderman went off to look for his house than he saw a lady getting hurt from bad people and he came and help the lady get away from them and after they the bad people ran away the lady said “ want can I do for you young man ‘’ than spider man said “ nothing that is just my job’’ then he went off to find his house.

Spiderman was looking all around new york city for his house he could not see anything from up the sky then he went on the ground and he thought that was his house but it wasn't his house and he was really striving for food then he heard a mysterious voice from beyond the new york city he was running to see who was shouting his name and he sa his wife waiting for his next to his house and he said “ think you god for helping me today.

THE END